This is a brilliant suspense story! The tension builds perfectly as Melanie’s paranoia escalates, leading her — and us — down a path of questions about her own mind and safety. The reveal about carbon dioxide poisoning is unexpected yet plausible, adding an eerie layer that’s grounded in reality. Ron’s concern and eventual support provide a warm, stabilizing influence, which rounds out the story beautifully.
Your use of sensory details, like the smell of burning toast or the creak of an old apartment, really pulls readers into Melanie’s deteriorating world. The way you weave in her fascination with true crime as a potential factor in her confusion is a clever touch, and the notes turning out to be her own under the effects of CO2 deprivation is the perfect twist.
The additional story teaser at the end for Trent’s story is intriguing too! It would draw readers into another layer of mystery. This story really nails the suspense while maintaining a sympathetic, relatable protagonist.
A Dog Fights A Massive Tumor, With The Vet Recommending Leg Amputation For Treatment
Rescuers in Thailand’s Phetchabun Province saw a sad homeless dog with a big tumor straining to move in agony.
She’d been suffering from this tumor for so long that no one would help her when it got too big.
It took nearly 6 hours for rescuers to bring her 455.5 kilometers from Phetchabun province to Pattaya for treatment.
A bad growth on her abdomen devastated her miserable life, and she ended up living on the streets without food.
Even though the wounds are dry, she is doing significantly better one month after a successful operation and tumor removal.
She’s starting to walk again and getting to know her three legs…
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